new dance tune

[jac79dj]

please feel free to check out my new tune. it is a collaberation with clearbear which started life within this site!.
please feel free to comment on it good or bad {although bad i will be unlikely to listen to unless its constructive critisism lol}
ive had alot of fun making the tune and i want to share it with you
the tune is called so secluded and the link is
http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6448031
many thanks in advance for your time

[clare_bear]

clearbear's my my new street name for the dance stuff

Listen though, he's done a great job

[jac79dj]

nobody want to comment then?

[Hypagen]

I enjoyed listening to it.

I think the kick drum could do with being a bit more pronounced, plus the drums seem to be coming from the right, which unbalances the mix, kick and snare are usually placed in the centre.

[DLM]

Vox rather flat.
Dreadfully bland rhythm guitar tone.
Don't like that style of beat music much anyway.
Gave up.
Sorry.

[jac79dj]

Originally Posted by Hypagen

I enjoyed listening to it.

I think the kick drum could do with being a bit more pronounced, plus the drums seem to be coming from the right, which unbalances the mix, kick and snare are usually placed in the centre.

ill check that out. could have been down to a nasty cold soons it clears ill have a listen and re adjust should it need it
glad you enjoyed listening to it

Vox rather flat.
Dreadfully bland rhythm guitar tone.
Don't like that style of beat music much anyway.
Gave up.
Sorry.

not quite constructive crit more of a bitching but comments taken on board none the less

[clare_bear]

Originally Posted by DLM

Vox rather flat.
Dreadfully bland rhythm guitar tone.
Don't like that style of beat music much anyway.
Gave up.
Sorry.

Oi you, who you calling flat

[get2sammyb]

Originally Posted by clare_bear

Oi you, who you calling flat

Haha. I like that.

I'm not a fan of the guitar tone. Sound like it could do with *something*. Just didn't have much magic.The vocals could do with autotune. They are flat in places.

The mixing is decent - the guitar tone brings everything down a touch though. There's something about it. The guitar sounds out of tune.

On the other hand - the BEATS are awesome. Particularly the bongos.

I'd suggest retracking the guitar (maybe get Amplitube?) and vocals (melodyne?)

[jac79dj]

i understand why you would say that about the guitar but it was the cleanness that sold it to me in the first place and while i did try various amps in amplitude2 and guitar rig it didnt fit with what i had in my head lol.
comments noted

[get2sammyb]

Originally Posted by jac79dj

i understand why you would say that about the guitar but it was the cleanness that sold it to me in the first place and while i did try various amps in amplitude2 and guitar rig it didnt fit with what i had in my head lol.
comments noted

I think maybe the third chord - sounds a bit off?